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Post by rayc5678 on Apr 24, 2019 12:59:15 GMT -6
Okay. So, I'm going to semi-close this thread. Unfortunately, it doesn't seem to be as popular as some of the other threads in this folder. I still have ideas for this, so I'm going to turn it into a story. I'm going to keep it open in case it picks back up and it can spread out into it's own thing away from the story that I'm going to create. Keep an eye out for the story.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 24, 2019 13:10:08 GMT -6
Buddy, Buddy, Buddy, slow your roll there! Popularity shouldn't be an issue. Write cause ya wanna, write cause it's fun! I understand you want others to enjoy it too and to be engaged, but that should be a symptom, not the purpose.
While we're on the subject, Maybe limit your this or that's?
When ya ask a question and someone answers, it's a little much asking another this or that... just an opinion, sorry if it comes off a tad abbrassive.
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Post by rayc5678 on Apr 24, 2019 13:29:36 GMT -6
Buddy, Buddy, Buddy, slow your roll there! Popularity shouldn't be an issue. Write cause ya wanna, write cause it's fun! I understand you want others to enjoy it too and to be engaged, but that should be a symptom, not the purpose. While we're on the subject, Maybe limit your this or that's? When ya ask a question and someone answers, it's a little much asking another this or that... just an opinion, sorry if it comes off a tad abbrassive. True, though I do like getting some details down before I write the next part, which helps me set the stage, so to speak. As I said, this will be semi-closed, and if more people show interest, then I'll get it going again. I'm also making it a story for people to enjoy to see and for me to enjoy writing.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 24, 2019 13:32:20 GMT -6
Cool. But, please, take my advice into consideration. You should only take so much stage direction.
It's cool you let people have so much options, but it can easily lessen the appeal, ya know?
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Post by rayc5678 on May 14, 2019 13:50:58 GMT -6
My muse to write has returned, so I'm going to re-open this thread again. I'm not expecting too much from this, hopefully enough keep my muse to write (in general). So, a brief recap of what I have down for an elderly Regina.
Regina's mother, Cora, was taken away from her by Snow White, by a spell that made her stay with her. Regina, who is very attached to her mother, vowed revenge against Snow. Both Snow and Regina, who are magic users, cast a spell to make them immortal. However, it took away their youth (all this happened about 40 years ago in the story), and supposedly took away their magic. Chris Steele, the protagonist, decided to help end the feud between the two of them and took off to see Regina. Before I stopped it, I started asking some questions about Regina's health. So far, she's in a wheelchair, which doubles as her throne. So, I'm going to re-ask my last question.
Should Regina wear hearing aids or glasses?
Yes, but just glasses.
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Yes, but just hearing aids.
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Yes, both.
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No, she can see and hear just fine.
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Post by Deleted on May 14, 2019 14:45:39 GMT -6
Yes, but just glasses
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Post by rayc5678 on May 14, 2019 15:56:41 GMT -6
One last question about Regina's current health problems. Should she shake due to palsy?
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Post by Deleted on May 14, 2019 15:57:33 GMT -6
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Post by rayc5678 on May 14, 2019 23:39:31 GMT -6
The main guard was about to answer, before another one came up and whispered into his ear. The guard looked at the messenger for a moment before looking over at Chris. “It seems that Queen Regina was impressed by your display, and has decided to grant you an audience,” he said, turning around. “Follow me,” he said, starting towards the castle. Chris followed, taking in the sights of the castle as he entered. The castle itself had three visible towers, though he assumed that there was more that he couldn't see. A massive garden surrounded the outside of the main building, with various fountains, hedges, flowers, etc, making up most of it. A half a dozen people were working on the garden itself, keeping it properly maintained. After a few minutes, the head guard, reached the huge wooden doors to the castle, which was open, with Chris following along. Inside the main hall portraits of various people, whom Chris assumed were important to Regina, along with long, elegant tables along the walls, high chandeliers hung from the ceiling. Chris also noted that there were quite a bit of servants, cleaning to front entrance alone. "Our queen is quite obsessed with cleanliness. She demands that everything's spotless. Otherwise she'll take it out on someone," the guard said, starting up the elegant stone staircase, with Chris following behind. Upon reaching the top of the stairs, the guard led Chris to an adjacent room. The room itself was huge, big enough to hold at least 500 people, maybe more. Inside the room were more guards, who stood at attention as soon as the head guard entered. At the end of the room upon a level that was raised up by several steps sat an old, frail looking woman in a high back chair. The chair itself had two large wooden wheels in the back and two small wooden in the front, which had a footrest, that was attached to the front of the chair. The woman, who had silver hair, and brown eyes, was wearing an elegant black dress, that surprisingly fit her old, wrinkled body, with jewels showing along the collar, which extended up above her head, and a bottom that opened up to cover her legs. A black crown sat upon her head, and black rimmed glasses sat upon her face. The glasses were attached to a chain made up of diamonds, which hung from her neck. Her skin was wrinkled and her face lips, which had lipstick on them, had quite a bit of scowl lines coming from the corners of her mouth. Her enter body shook with palsy, which made her jowl easily more visible. "Her Royal Majesty, Queen Regina Mills," the head guard said to Chris, indicating for him to kneel. When the young man didn't, he struck the back of his knee, forcing him down, before kneeling down himself. "You're Chris Steele, the young man I saw fly here and shoot magic at Robin's head," Regina said, looking at Chris, studying him. "I must say, you're stronger than I imagined," she told him. "Why have you come here? Did you come to join me and become one of my loyal magicians, and help me take down Snow White, or did you come here to kill me?" "Neither," Chris answered. "I came here to offer my services, in order to end this conflict, peacefully," the young man told her. He could tell that she had magic. It wasn't a lot though, but enough to rule over the kingdom with fear. "Peacefully? That'll never happen,"Regina scoffed. "The only way for this to end is for me to take back what's mine and to destroy Snow White," she said, gripping the arm of her wheelchair. "Bring him to me," she said, motioning for Robin and a few other guards to get Chris. Robin, and a couple of other guards, grabbed him and took him up the stairs until he was face to face with Regina. "Since you won't join me willingly, then I have no other choice." ----------------------------------This or That: What does Regina do to Chris?
This: She attempts to take out his heart so she can control him.
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That: She locks him up in the dungeon.
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Post by Deleted on May 15, 2019 13:26:08 GMT -6
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Post by rayc5678 on May 16, 2019 4:47:03 GMT -6
"Take him away," Regina said, waving a shaky, wrinkled hand, as the guards grabbed Chris and started to take him out of the room. "I hope that being in our dungeon for a while will change your mind," the queen said to Chris as he was taken out of the room. The trip down to the dungeon was surprisingly quick. After only going down two sets of stairs, and changing scenery, from light and open, to dark and cramped, they arrived at the dungeon. Opening up a cell door, the guards threw Chris inside and locked door. "I hope that you change your mind magician. The queen can use all the help she gets," Robin said from the other side of the cell, looking at the young man for a moment before turning and walking away. "I'm not surprised that she actually locked me away," Chris said out loud, mostly to himself. "I would have been surprised if she accepted my offer, but oh well," he said, examining his cell, which wasn't much. The floor was made of stone with some hay covering it. Of course, the only light source was from the torches that were on the outside of cell, so he couldn't really see the whole thing. Since there were no windows, and the dampness, he could tell that he was underground. "Who's there?" The voice of an elderly woman came from inside the darkness of the cell. "My name's Chris," he said, introducing himself as he turned around, looking for the source of the voice. "And you are?" ---------------------------------- This or That: Who's in the cell with Chris? This: Belle French (originally from Beauty and the Beast) or That: Jasmine (originally from Aladdin) or Also That: Reader's Choice (Author's Note: From now on, all the female characters from the show will be old women in this story. If you're not sure which characters have appeared in the show, check out the Once Upon a Time Wiki (which is linked here), and see which characters you want to see in the story.)
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Post by Deleted on May 16, 2019 12:32:29 GMT -6
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Post by rayc5678 on May 16, 2019 12:50:42 GMT -6
Alright. From now on, when a new, elderly female character is introduced in this story, I'm going to ask three questions in regards to her physical condition, which will help me write the story. Depending on the situation, the questions will vary, but they'll essentially be the same.
Since Belle's calling out, should she be...
This: Blind?
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That: Paralyzed/Immobile?
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Also That: Reader's Choice
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Post by Deleted on May 16, 2019 12:54:51 GMT -6
Again, I like that you really focus on the interactive aspect of your story.
But, don't you think you're giving the voter a little to much power?
We can only do so much for the story.
Also, I'll go with this.
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Post by rayc5678 on May 16, 2019 13:04:57 GMT -6
Thanks, and that's true. I do have a general direction as to which way I want the story to go, but some of the small details, I'm giving to the voter.
Since Belle's blind, should she have a walking cane (the ones for the blind)?
This: Yes.
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That: No, she stumbles around and feels her way around all the time.
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